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okay

it wasn't too bad, but it wasnt good either. you made the navigation easy which is always a good thing, and you put some of the basic stuff in, however, alot more is needed really.

your design page isnt too bad, and although im sure it could be better, i cant really give any advice on how to improve it...

the moves page though...it scans over the basics, but there needs to be so much more detail in order to be good. all you did on the second page of it was show the actual move, like the frame of the hit, not how to do it. it doesnt greatly help. and honestly, i didnt think the punch example was that good, i went through it frame by frame, and obviously watched it through a few times. the sticks jumping in the canvas looked okay, but when it came to the punch, it wasnt very good at all to be honest:

firstly, contrary to what you said, i dont think the blackness was needed. and the movement leading up to the punch and the punch itself wern't very good. he stayed in the exact same stance for too long (just moving forward a bit each frame). looking at it, all you did was make him jump in the air (which was fine) but then you made him stay the same for a good four or so frames, what you need to do, is even when he's staying in the same position, still redraw him anyway, honestly it makes it look better. then when it came to the punch all it was was him in the same position as before, except this time he had his arm stretched with some sudden blur and blackness which made it hard to know what he was doing (and i think neither the blur or the blackness were necissary, especially for the amount of frames that the blur was shown). the punch frame needs to be fully redrawn from the last frame. he needs to lean into the punch more, i dont know, its hard to explain, but it just didnt look right, and therefore isnt really great for a tutorial, it looked like it had hardly any impace, which isnt good for a section showing impact.

you didnt say how to do the effects and when to use them effectively which is something that i would think is important in an animation like this.

the background section was far too simple, it needs more showing of how to draw backgrounds etc

overall it was okay, but needs alot of improvement and is really too basic. but not a bad start anyway, just improve on it. i just cant see it helping greatly since its too basic. but it at least tells you whats good and what to do so it might help some people. it could use more example videos next time.

hope i didnt seem too harsh, just trying to give advice :)

Luis-Felipe responds:

Hello,

wow, thanks for the excellent review. i was not expecting this lenght. Thank you.

Ok so just to recap a litle, its a tips and tricks followthrough and of course I understand what you mean, I touched but the tip of the iceberg. You've encouraged me to do a bigger and better one. I'll add all of those litle details for the next ones to come.

Thanks again St3lf

the 'Stelf' stands for 'STE' 'L'ee 'F'itzpatrick. Xiao style 3, coming soon!

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